second group meeting

I have my second group meeting today, and I finally have a finished script!!! It needs some work, but I'm posting it here for my group to view. NOTQUITEWRITE.

Okay it's about an hour later, and the group has reviewed my script. It was a lot of fun watching everyone's face and trying to guess what absurd part they were at. And the general consensus was... they didn't hate it!!! They really liked the ending and now it kind of tied things together, which was the goal so I'm happy with that. 

The only real issue that people pointed out was the first conversation between the two main characters. It was a really awkward conversation that didn't really flow well, and it felt completely unnatural. Which I personally fully agreed with. When I had written it originally, I sort of rushed it because I was struggling to figure out what to say. Now, I know that I should go back and both shorten it, and make it seem more natural. Mateo gave me some good advice, which is to have people read out loud the dialogue while writing it. 

My teacher also read the script. She didn't love the second half, and said it had some pacing issues. Which I get, because it kind of does. Her solution was just cutting most of the second half, and leaving the audience to wonder how the two main characters escape. I do not love this route, but I can very easily film for both and decide which is better in editing, so that's what I shall do.